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igenlodeI have decided to standardise -- three years after initially worrying about it! -- on 'Miss Daaé' rather than Mademoiselle Daaé for Christine, save for those occasions when she is addressed simply as 'mademoiselle'. Perhaps not entirely logical in conjunction with the various other usages of titles (Monsieur, Madame, monsieur le Marquis), but it was the variant that sounded better in context. I can always alter it the other way if essential.
(Noting the change here for my own future reference!)
Edit: I actually think I've managed to fix Ch26 relatively easily, once I actually made the effort to do it (demonstrating yet again that I only respond to impending deadlines and/or threats :-() I've tweaked the offending passage about Raoul's illness to suggest that his haggard appearance was psychological rather than a threat of impending demise (he looked like a man who'd forced himself from his sickbed to face an ordeal rather than a dying man dragged from his bed), and added a couple of phrases to clarify the dialogue and the fact that Philippe thinks Raoul is dead, and that the nominal purpose all along of all the flashback material was to show Christine eventually softening towards her future brother-in-law... and I think it works. So the task that I thought I would struggle to finish in the course of several days was actually achieved within the space of a couple of hours.
(Noting the change here for my own future reference!)
Edit: I actually think I've managed to fix Ch26 relatively easily, once I actually made the effort to do it (demonstrating yet again that I only respond to impending deadlines and/or threats :-() I've tweaked the offending passage about Raoul's illness to suggest that his haggard appearance was psychological rather than a threat of impending demise (he looked like a man who'd forced himself from his sickbed to face an ordeal rather than a dying man dragged from his bed), and added a couple of phrases to clarify the dialogue and the fact that Philippe thinks Raoul is dead, and that the nominal purpose all along of all the flashback material was to show Christine eventually softening towards her future brother-in-law... and I think it works. So the task that I thought I would struggle to finish in the course of several days was actually achieved within the space of a couple of hours.