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Chapter 2 — Rapprochement

His Lordship the Earl of Carnforth —or rather, the Countess his spouse— had spared no expense to lay on an entertainment on a truly grand scale. Lady Blaymere’s social evenings, by comparison, had been little more than a supper party with cultural pretensions. Following young Roland de Céligny through room after room ablaze with light and costly hangings, where the quivering flame of hundreds of candles was cast back by mirrors and by crystal lustres overhead, and servants in livery moved deftly amidst the throng, Artus de Brencourt could almost have imagined himself transported to some princely court, or back in a dream of the France of his youth.

Only those days had vanished as thoroughly as the youth that had fled —barren and wasted, all of it— or the laughter of the little Queen at Versailles. Quite how empty that dream had become he knew better now than anyone here.Read more... )

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After about six months, I made another attempt at the first chapter for "Ashes" (and it's just as well that I did write down my intended titles for the other two chapters, because after this length of time I couldn't remember them! I was vaguely thinking that I'd decided on "Resurrection" for Ch3, but apparently it was "Revelation", which is definitely better...)

I've largely rewritten the opening section and set it in a new context, and beyond that simply omitted certain bits of backstory from the later scenes; the whole thing now runs about eleven hundred words shorter even with the added material at the beginning. Which is, objectively speaking, less than I had remembered -- it just felt like an awful lot at the time because such a very high proportion of it consisted of crossings-out :-(


“Where Roland’s sword had failed utterly, de Brencourt, despite everything, had brought them all off to safety as well as could be managed”: AU in which the rescue plans succeeded. Two years later, Roland has an unexpected encounter, and an inspiration.

Chapter 1 — Reunion

“Anyone would think,” Marthe observed pertly, “that nobody in London had ever seen a Frenchwoman before.” Read more... )

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My speculations as to Roland's future, post-canon. And a trifle of actual plot. (The deleted passage from "The Remorse of Others" rewrite did get used!)


Ashes

“Where Roland’s sword had failed utterly, de Brencourt, despite everything, had brought them all off to safety as well as could be managed”: AU in which the rescue plans succeeded. Two years later, Roland has an unexpected encounter, and an inspiration.

Chapter 1 — Reunion

London, in this year of grace 1802 — with its foreign rooflines, its parks and garden squares, and the crowds of all nations that seemed to fill its teeming streets — was a trifle overwhelming to a young man who had never before set foot beyond his native shores. But England, weary of war, had at long last reconciled herself to the existence of the upstart French Republic under Napoleon Bonaparte, whose conscript armies had defeated half the crowned heads of Europe, and for the first time in ten years it had become possible for travellers to cross the Channel in both directions in perfect safety... and while the English, cut off for so long from the Continent, flocked abroad, no few of Roland de Céligny’s compatriots had likewise seized the opportunity. One could take ship openly for Dover without having recourse to the aid of smugglers or spies, and with one’s wife dressed in all the latest fashions —styles that were already, as Marthe observed with her usual high spirits, clearly inspiring imitation among the ladies of London society— even if, as in Roland’s case, one happened to be a young gentleman with a sufficiently intemperate Royalist past to make it inadvisable, as a rule, to attract the attention of the authorities.

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The Remorse of Others

It was a fine winter’s day; as fine as Gaston de Trélan had thought it might be, when the first red dawn had showed above the walls of the Temple prison on his final journey out to the chateau of Mirabel. Only he lay there now silent and still, and the sun would never warm him again.

It had been very quick; very efficient. The single sharp volley was over in moments. All the same, even before the assembled troops had dispersed, echoes of another kind from the firing squad had begun to run through Paris amid gathering unrest at the news. There were sullen murmurs on street corners against what had been done, and the means by which it had been accomplished... but no whisper of them had reached to the little spinney on the outskirts of the city where a young man had just dismounted, nor come as yet to trouble the ears of that rather disconsolate young gentleman.

A squirrel, busy stripping the first buds from the branches high above, chattered sharply, and the hired mare threw up her head. Roland soothed her with word and touch, and stooped to run a hand cautiously down her foreleg, ashamed of his own lack of attention.Read more... )


Note to self (because I know from past experience that in ten years' time I shall have forgotten the subtext I was intending to imply!): the dialogue exchanges between Valentine and de Brencourt that Roland does not hear relate to Valentine passing on Gaston's explanation of why he would have *had* to attend the arranged surrender even if he had been certain that his opponents intended to breach the safe-conduct, because failure to do so would have been taken as a refusal to surrender and brought down reprisals upon those he was trying to protect... to which her canon reaction is "I will point out that aspect to the Comte—for he has suffered, Gaston". However, she doesn't have the opportunity or indeed any thought to spare of doing so when next she and de Brencourt meet, so in this story, after her long vigil at Mirabel, when in a calmer state of mind she does as she had said she would in an attempt to ease his mind also. The other message she has to convey to him would be the one entrusted to her in Gaston's final letter (the existence of which Roland is as yet unaware): I ask de Brencourt's pardon once more for what I said to him at La Vergne when he tried to warn me.

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At this point it's starting to get repetitive to say, yet again, that 'thanks to continuing work I haven't completed much this year' -- despite the fact that I *have* been writing pretty much constantly, six days a week at least, I have published very little. The only difference is that it isn't currently 'the Swedish story' holding matters up, though I have managed a certain amount of editing work on that.Read more... )
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And... finished. Well, that's certainly three thousand words I wouldn't have written otherwise ;-)

(And a canon I almost certainly wouldn't have written fan-fiction for at all -- I can't even remember why I started, except that I happened to have mentioned that novel a few days before in some context, probably because it's one of the very few of Broster's works that happens to be available online, and therefore I had the book off the shelves and hanging around on the first of November. Though I *have* always had a fellow-feeling for de Brencourt, along with various other deeply flawed anti-heroes...)

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A last-minute (surprise!) change of plan; in order to reduce the 'disjointed' effect, we omit the entire episode of the fake escort which turns out to be a real one, and cut to the aftermath. Which means that Gaston only gets a single PoV chapter overall, I think (Absent). Again, probably symptomatic of the shifted focus throughout -- the vast majority of the chapters are either de Brencourt or Valentine.

It does work well with my expressed desire to do more of de Brencourt's PoV for the bits the author only implies in retrospect and in passing, though. I'm pretty pleased with how much of the latter I've managed to cover, as things have turned out; it brings the result closer to actual fan-fiction rather than an exercise in summary/retelling.

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I'm sorry to have left out so much of Roland; from a genuine fan-fiction point of view, I can't help wondering where he did go on that final morning, when we learn only that he is out and fails to return before the end of the novel, and more importantly what on earth his reactions must have been when he did arrive back to discover that his world has fallen about his ears in his absence (and to learn it at the hands of the Comte de Brencourt, when there has never been much liking lost between them)...

Hyde de Neuville )
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The end of this series is going to be a bit disjointed, as the beginning was, because I'm just picking out elements to fit the prompts rather than trying to cover the entire plot.

Basically I could either have done a retelling of an existing work in drabbles *or* created a plot from a given series of arbitrary prompts (or just done a stand-alone drabble to match every prompt-word, of course; one of my 'fellow-competitors' has done what amounts to a shopping-list for both her last two entries, a list of ingredients and side-effects for 'medicine' followed by a list of her current tasks and distractions for 'concentration'!)

But trying to achieve both -- while using a book chosen pretty much at random and a prompt-list I hadn't even scanned in advance -- would be an impossible task. Just trying to fill the prompts in plot order so that they form some kind of coherent narrative is a ridiculously challenging extra commitment :-(

(Of course, I do have the advantage that I'm not actually bothering to make anything up :-p)

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I think I just about managed to redirect this one to meet the prompt; as I'd feared, there aren't exactly many parts of that angst-filled interview to which 'concentration' as such is really relevant...

As she had suspected, Gaston would not hear of her humbling herself to the First Consul's wife. But sitting there in the narrow confines of his prison cell, every atom of her being focused on him, she became increasingly certain that he was evading her true concerns.

"If the plan for tomorrow should fail—" She brought the question back yet again, insistent. "Gaston, what is to happen? Will Bonaparte keep you imprisoned for years, perhaps?"

His hand tightened on hers in answer.

"The truth, Valentine, is that if I am not rescued, I shall undoubtedly be shot... as an— example."




Sourdough plum cake )
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It still counts for the day if it's done before dawn, right? :(

She had seen very little of the Comte de Brencourt since their arrival in Paris; he had been almost constantly occupied on her behalf, and in the attempts to save Gaston. As he bent now to kiss her hand, she saw for the first time how worn and ill he looked, and how sleepless his nights had been of late.

Hers had been no better... but he had procured her the best possible medicine for that, in the shape of a visiting order to see her husband. For the Comte's own sufferings she had no remedy to offer in return.
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Day 25: the end is in sight. (Oddly enough it still feels like quite a long way before the end of the *plot*...)

It was hard, so hard to wait while she could do nothing and Gaston's life hung in the balance...

"Roland, if tomorrow night's scheme should fail... I have heard that Madame Bonaparte is greedy for jewels, they say, and of Royalist leanings. If I offered her the Mirabel rubies, the last of the treasure, would she use her influence with her husband, do you think?"

Roland looked startled. "Forgive me, but — would the Duc endorse such a step?"

"I should appeal as one wife to another... without touching his pride."

Only Gaston would not approve. She knew that too well.
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I've discovered a reference to de Brencourt looking ill, which will serve for 'medicine' (and will get Valentine to the Temple); admittedly the dialogue immediately *following* consists of material that I've already used under the heading of 'herb', but it's more than reasonable to assume that the Comte has been haunted by the same ideas ever since their arrival in Paris, rather than only conceiving them in the moment that he discloses them aloud. But that then means that I need to use the preceding reference to Joséphine, i.e. the discussion with Roland, for 'gossip', rather than Valentine's actual approach to Gaston.

I think poor Roland is otherwise going to have to be excised, including all awareness of his parentage -- 'surprise' needs to be the Cavaradossi moment, and I think 'leadership' will have to be the Vendean peasants rather than anything said during the father/son interview, so that element (and with it any chance of including the events at Hennebont) effectively ends up simplified out of existence. Which just leaves me with 'concentration' to fit into Valentine's scene somewhere. 'Flawed' I think may end up being de Brencourt himself, meaning that we lose the entire Mirabel epilogue.
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It's definitely winter now -- not only am I taking a hot-water-bottle to bed, but my central heating came on for the first time at six o'clock this evening! (Not for long, as the sensor is in the warmest place... the corridor outside the kitchen :-p)


Paris was in a positive ferment of Royalist conspiracy at present, and there had been a great deal of ill-feeling over the circumstances of the Duc de Trélan's capture. It should be possible to effect his escape, and indeed a promising scheme was afoot for the very next day. Precision would be required, and sufficient purloined uniforms to outfit an entire escort and commanding officer, who would present counterfeit orders for the prisoner's transfer to some other place of confinement.

Tomorrow evening, provided it all went exactly according to plan, Valentine and her husband would be making for the coast.
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Broster doesn't name the "obscure little hôtel garni in the Rue du Vieux-Colombier" in which de Brencourt lodges while Valentine is staying in her old room with Suzon, so taking a lead out of Elizabeth Goudge and naming it "the Herb of Grace" seemed appropriate :-)
And the herb of grace *is*, of course, rue...

Returning alone to his lodgings at the sign of the Herbe-de-Grâce, he shivered.

This summer past, at Mirabel, he had begged Valentine to come away with him as sister and brother and let him devote his life to her service. Well, he had that now — would to God he had not!

He was the one man alive who should not have carried that warning. He had brought this down upon her like Nemesis on them both. And though de Trélan had sent regrets — however dearly that cost the other man's pride — in his mouth lay the bitter taste of rue.
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Dull and informative.
'Precision' can be Hyde de Neuville's escape plan; 'Gossip', Josephine Bonaparte (not yet the Empress Josephine!)
I still don't know what to do with 'Medicine', and we really need to get Valentine (?and Roland?) into the Temple...

The Duc de Trélan had arrived in Vannes the day before; the whole town, as they drove in, was ringing with the news. But it had not been under safe-conduct, but under arrest, and he had not come to face a formal surrender, but a summary tribunal that duly passed a death sentence.

They had used the umbrella charge that the Duc was a rebel taken in arms — an émigré making war upon his own country, who had never intended to capitulate. Bonaparte, newly acclaimed First Consul, wished to make a salutary example. The prisoner had been taken to Paris.
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'Umbrella' can refer to the use of general charges for the arrest; 'herb' can be metaphorical rue. That takes us up to Paris in terms of the plot. I still don't know what to do with 'medicine' (or, for that matter, 'precision' or 'gossip').

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It was eighty miles to La Vergne. Eighty miles to ride, day and night, and he was a sick man.

Mud-spattered from head to foot, he half-fell into the hall; gasped out his warning to its recipient, who surveyed him pitilessly.

"Treachery, de Brencourt? Your speciality, no doubt!"

The words struck like a blow. He found a chair; clung on.

"Your safe-conduct is wastepaper, I tell you. You are going to your death. In God's name, why else would I have come?"

"I cannot pretend to guess." Ice-cold. "Your motives may be obscure, monsieur, but your deceit has failed — again."


The Duc de Trélan is not being quite as obtuse here as it might appear... )
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The Comte de Brencourt finds himself yet again caught between the prongs of love, pride and honour in the face of underhand dealings from elsewhere...

He'd failed to die by his own hand, and failed to die as he had hoped in the uprising. Now he lay feverish and ill in the inn at Vannes, and heard through the cracked partition news from the enemy dispatches.

The Marquis de Kersaint, last of those still under arms, was to surrender under safe-conduct. Safe-conduct notwithstanding, he was then to be shot.

--

Somehow a message had to be sent. Only he could not — could not! — ride to beg pardon, to buy forgiveness with his warning... His own perfidy was too recent in mind. Yet for Valentine he must.
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Once, in the old, idle, vicious days, she had longed for Gaston de Trélan to find a purpose in life. Now that he had come back to her a soldier and a hero, she had begun at last to realise the price that fulfilment might cost.

She had not understood before tonight just how badly the fight was going; how close to danger they stood. Only she must lie still, must not toss and turn, for he must ride tomorrow and was in need of sleep.

His breathing at her side was calm and steady. Valentine awaited the coming dawn.
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It turns out that 'shenanigans' is potentially less jovial and more accusatory (e.g. "he was trying to conceal his financial shenanigans") than I'd assumed, so I can use that to cover the safe-conduct business, coupled with 'obscure' and 'passion'. That will at least have the important part of the plot established, and I can spend the remaining nine prompts in picking out assorted details from the rest, if necessary. I still have no idea what I'm going to do with 'umbrella', 'herb' and 'medicine'. 'Flawed' isn't exactly ideal for the final prompt, either, so I might have to cut it short at the discolouration of the steps...

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