Drabble plans to the end
25 November 2021 02:47 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
igenlodeI've discovered a reference to de Brencourt looking ill, which will serve for 'medicine' (and will get Valentine to the Temple); admittedly the dialogue immediately *following* consists of material that I've already used under the heading of 'herb', but it's more than reasonable to assume that the Comte has been haunted by the same ideas ever since their arrival in Paris, rather than only conceiving them in the moment that he discloses them aloud. But that then means that I need to use the preceding reference to Joséphine, i.e. the discussion with Roland, for 'gossip', rather than Valentine's actual approach to Gaston.
I think poor Roland is otherwise going to have to be excised, including all awareness of his parentage -- 'surprise' needs to be the Cavaradossi moment, and I think 'leadership' will have to be the Vendean peasants rather than anything said during the father/son interview, so that element (and with it any chance of including the events at Hennebont) effectively ends up simplified out of existence. Which just leaves me with 'concentration' to fit into Valentine's scene somewhere. 'Flawed' I think may end up being de Brencourt himself, meaning that we lose the entire Mirabel epilogue.
One thing that this drabble exercise has brought to light is how odd, in the face of it, it is that Valentine and her husband spend most of her prison visit discussing what will happen if the rescue attempt is to fail, and arguing over her alternative plans -- and yet there is no obvious reason to expect any mishap or agonise over the consequences, save the generalised possibility that "the best plans sometimes fail". Hyde de Neuville is pretty confident over his arrangements, but everyone seems to be anticipating an execution...
I think poor Roland is otherwise going to have to be excised, including all awareness of his parentage -- 'surprise' needs to be the Cavaradossi moment, and I think 'leadership' will have to be the Vendean peasants rather than anything said during the father/son interview, so that element (and with it any chance of including the events at Hennebont) effectively ends up simplified out of existence. Which just leaves me with 'concentration' to fit into Valentine's scene somewhere. 'Flawed' I think may end up being de Brencourt himself, meaning that we lose the entire Mirabel epilogue.
One thing that this drabble exercise has brought to light is how odd, in the face of it, it is that Valentine and her husband spend most of her prison visit discussing what will happen if the rescue attempt is to fail, and arguing over her alternative plans -- and yet there is no obvious reason to expect any mishap or agonise over the consequences, save the generalised possibility that "the best plans sometimes fail". Hyde de Neuville is pretty confident over his arrangements, but everyone seems to be anticipating an execution...