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I've just finished working my way through a 1960s anthology of First World War poetry (presumably published for the 50th anniversary of the war, although I don't remember its actually saying so anywhere), which is very effective, and affecting. It's effective precisely because it isn't the standard modern selection (Rupert Brooke, Wilfred Owen, Siegfried Sassoon) telling us what we're supposed to think about 'the War Poets' at a GCSE level of complexity; it's a compilation of what was actually written at the time, sent home on the back of letters, published in the newspapers, or found after death in uniform pockets. As the foreword puts it, it is largely a collection of lesser-known pieces, some of which are very good, most of which are good, and some of which are mediocre but poignant in their immediacy.Read more... )
Poem extracts )
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Ironically, although this final chapter is narrated from Christine's point of view it's really Gustave's backstory, just as the previous chapter was as much Christine's backstory as Raoul's...


Ch 4: Mort pour la France

Paris in the autumn was as busy as ever. The leaves on the trees were dusty as the streets and beginning to turn brown, and the sun through the windows of the tramcar struck hot on Christine’s cheek as it had not done all summer — or perhaps, she thought, adjusting her blue uniform cloak, perhaps it had, and she had not been in any condition to notice it.

She descended from the tram at the corner of the boulevard Mont-St-Fleury with a nod to the lady conductress — the war had changed many things — and began to walk rather slowly towards the little café further down. In the pocket of her dress, behind the red cross sewn at her breast, lay the letter that had brought her here, dragging at her steps like a weight from which she had believed herself cut free. She was tired: too tired to feel anything, she told herself, with a bone-deep weariness born of long nights of strain and endless exhausting days of labour over shattered bodies in improvised wards behind the lines.

There was nothing romantic in nursing; Raoul had been right — poor Raoul! But that reflex jolt of memory was nothing more than a dull echo now.Read more... )

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Well, I finally received one of the reviews I was holding out for on this (not sure if that was divine reproof for having doubted it or intervention for having mentioned it), so I now have no excuse whatsoever for not getting on with the next part...

Tweaked Raoul's reaction to the Phantom's death a little (previously he seemed to more or less ignore it). One thing that does strike me, reading over this after a lapse of time, is that it's really not made nearly so explicit as I thought it was that Gustave has taken up writing poetry in place of music :-(


Ch3: Some unknown grieving woman

Somewhere outside, a motor pulled up. Voices carried faintly through the window. Raoul glanced back up at the clock; down at what he had written, where a long blot straggled across the paper. After a moment he set his pen aside and tore up the unfinished page with unnecessary force.

He dipped the pen again, drew up a fresh sheet, and began to write, jerkily and with hesitation. Above the fireplace the ghost of a portrait looked down, as always. But it was not the shy young face painted by Boldini that was intruding upon his letter, but that of an older woman.

Fresh memories, these, from the near side of the howling swathe of steel that had swept across France. Her face danced between him and the phrase he sought, marked with lines of unhappiness and held high in defiance. He crossed out a word, cursed under his breath, and tried another.

Read more... )

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I'm not sure this is as good as I thought it was when I started, but... well, I'm stuck with it now.


In Regret, Always

Eight years ago, Raoul left a letter for his wife, took Gustave, and set off to leave Coney Island. Now, as the clouds of war hang over France, the echoes of that night still haunt them all.

Ch1: The final wrong

It was still cold in this first spring of the war, despite the afternoon sun, and a bitter wind crept over the Paris rooftops and rattled the long shutters of the Hôtel de Chagny. There was a fire in the grate of the Vicomte’s study, as if to banish for a few final hours the memories of months of rain and freezing mud, and from the mantel above there came the sleepy ticking of the clock; but from time to time, as his pen paused for a moment in its steady travel across the page, the gusts outside seemed to hold the echo of great guns in Champagne and the Ardennes.

Raoul’s face held lines of strain now in addition to the bitter marks that belied his age, and the bright uniform of scarlet and sky-blue that had served France so well in parades and regimental balls had been discarded for the drab blue of this new way of fighting. Every so often, in an unconscious gesture, he would reach up to run two fingers round the inside of his collar. The uniform tunic was trim enough, but it had begun to hang a little loose on his frame, and there were hollows under his eyes that eight days’ leave had done nothing to redress.Read more... )

The end?

28 June 2017 03:11 am
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Right, I think I've come up with an end: Gustave's poetry, if I can get it right.

(If he does end up in the trenches, the suggestion is that he will be one of the 'war poets'; the other idea is that the story of his parents will at least offer the potential to be immortalised as tragic poetry, if nothing else. Not sure I'm succeeding in conveying either at the moment yet...)
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I'm not sure how much, if any, of this is relevant, but it's interesting period information:
Paris War Days by Charles Inman Barnard, a diary of the outbreak of the war by an American in Paris.
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Research: it looks as if -- even though the Americans didn't have a system of sending over voluntary nurses, which was my original idea for how Christine arrives back in France -- the French hospitals did use them ("infirmières bénévoles"/"infirmières auxiliaires"), courtesy of various voluntary societies. Read more... )
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Well, we have a title. Not "The Two Letters" -- further letters having emerged in the plot -- but "In Regret, Always".
We also have a summary, provisionally at least, and about six hundred words of beginning (two days' concentrated work; at this rate, the story is going to take some time...)

Apparently I made several wrong assumptions so far as the WW1 stuff goes, partly due to cursory reading of inaccurate sources; there was no 'second wave' call-up of older men, so Raoul would have been involved right from the start. After several days' panic I worked out that the dates are about right for him to be on leave (assuming he's an officer; the first leave didn't come through for the general troops until considerably later), although this of course has knock-on effects on everything else. Gustave is rather further away from official call-up age (twenty in France) than I had imagined, although rather closer in reality than the official dates would suggest. And there was no American equivalent of the VAD for untrained women :-(

I hope I don't find any more nasty holes after I've written the material...
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After my recent throwaway comment (à propos Christine's hostile reaction after Raoul's renunciation letter) to the effect that if Raoul had taken Gustave then a lot of tragedy all round would have been avoided, I ended up -- somewhat to my disbelief/dismay -- getting more LND plot nibbles...

I'd have to be careful, because this is actually a plotline I've seen done in fan-fiction, albeit in a somewhat different vein. plot elements so far )
Notes on French Army in WW1 )
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Finally we get to see the characters in a contented middle-age... which means of course that they have to negotiate the rapids of the First World War first :-(

I think this Raoul is still very much in love with Christine, to be honest. (And he's Victorian enough in his outlook to appreciate a bit of extra padding, though she assumes that's just flattery!) But she doesn't want him to say it, so he isn't going to push matters any further.


Ch3: So Glad You're Here )

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Unbelievably, I've actually completed circa 9,000 words of story in five days: Waiting in the Wings took three weeks, and I thought that was doing well. Of course the fact that I actually wrote more or less non-stop for the whole of Friday and then Sunday (rather than struggling to achieve a 400-word quota over a matter of hours) helped! I'm no longer quite so astounded as to how I managed to write my first 50,000-word novel in a month or so, since I remember pouring out dialogue at much the same rate onto sheet after sheet of paper. It's so much easier when you've only just invented it, and are frothing up with new ideas and backstory even as you go along... (I suppose the moral of that is to have nice simple plot ideas, so that you can get them down on the page quickly :-p)

Raoul acquired an impromptu limp and an illegitimate daughter more or less on the spur of the moment while I was writing this: the injury seemed to make psychological sense at the time (as a wound from the Great War, it's a badge of honour to counteract his sense of public dishonour), and the little girl was an attempt to show that he has in fact been getting on with his life quite adequately away from Christine... although to fulfil the remit, it had to be an irregular relationship to demonstrate that the two protagonists were both still 'single'! (And I confess that it always seemed rather unfair to me that because Christine has Gustave, Raoul therefore can't have any descendants at all, though making it a girl was a gesture at the awkward situation that might ensue between an older and a younger son where the latter was illegitimate and the former was completely unrelated to his supposed father...)
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