Lack of fic progress
20 January 2022 09:44 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
igenlodeI thought I was well away on the final scene between Christine and Hertha, with a point-to-point route planned to include all the necessary dialogue... and then I decided it really wasn't credible for them to be having this fraught and above all *loud* conversation within a few feet of a sleeping Raoul :-(
I'd managed to circumvent the issue of his lack of injury in the stage-version as versus the original movie-fic plotline by simply having the family doctor give him a sedative for his nerves and general exhaustion (while Christine, who would logically have been a candidate for similar treatment, adamantly refuses and is thus conveniently awake!) However, he isn't deeply unconscious but merely in a slightly stupefied slumber, and I've already had him half-waken when Christine actually kisses him -- which I suppose under Tumblr mores counts as Unsolicited Sexual Assault! -- so it makes no sense for them to engage in uninhibited emotion right next to the couch on which he is lying.
I need to go back and have them leave the room at some point shortly after the kiss; at the moment I'm thinking that maybe Christine could have some extra dialogue after "the first time, and the last" saying that now both he and Hertha can be well rid of her, providing a cue for walking out. At which point Hertha's line of "I don't understand" can come as part of an attempt to corner Christine and get an explanation out of her before she leaves the house...
Meanwhile I'm still hung up on this ridiculous business of the three winters in Arctic Raoul. The sensible thing to do would be to let it be tacitly assumed that, after despairing in summer, the d'Artois Expedition do indeed pass the whole of another winter and then most of another summer on the ice before Raoul meets up with them. It just seems like an awfully big gap, when I thought I'd been to such lengths to come up with a complete narrative that would plausibly provide them with activities for the whole of the 'three years' by cleverly abbreviating it to two-and-a-bit :-(
I'd managed to circumvent the issue of his lack of injury in the stage-version as versus the original movie-fic plotline by simply having the family doctor give him a sedative for his nerves and general exhaustion (while Christine, who would logically have been a candidate for similar treatment, adamantly refuses and is thus conveniently awake!) However, he isn't deeply unconscious but merely in a slightly stupefied slumber, and I've already had him half-waken when Christine actually kisses him -- which I suppose under Tumblr mores counts as Unsolicited Sexual Assault! -- so it makes no sense for them to engage in uninhibited emotion right next to the couch on which he is lying.
I need to go back and have them leave the room at some point shortly after the kiss; at the moment I'm thinking that maybe Christine could have some extra dialogue after "the first time, and the last" saying that now both he and Hertha can be well rid of her, providing a cue for walking out. At which point Hertha's line of "I don't understand" can come as part of an attempt to corner Christine and get an explanation out of her before she leaves the house...
Meanwhile I'm still hung up on this ridiculous business of the three winters in Arctic Raoul. The sensible thing to do would be to let it be tacitly assumed that, after despairing in summer, the d'Artois Expedition do indeed pass the whole of another winter and then most of another summer on the ice before Raoul meets up with them. It just seems like an awfully big gap, when I thought I'd been to such lengths to come up with a complete narrative that would plausibly provide them with activities for the whole of the 'three years' by cleverly abbreviating it to two-and-a-bit :-(
