Another rewrite

Another rewrite (not so extensive this time) for someone who is 'struggling with an argument': as usual, I haven't done all that much to the actual dialogue, just tried to frame it in a smoother-flowing way. And fixed the actual errors.

"'Well you said the sigil looked fine.'

"'I wasn't paying attention. I expected you to be smart enough to remember basic kanji'.

"'You know I've always been average at everything.'

"'No, you're not!' Osu barked, and for a second, Kamitaro thought a compliment might be coming. 'You're not average. You're a freakin' idiot!'

"Kamitaro involuntarily changed into the kappa again. 'Don't pin this on me. You were meant to be protecting me. This is YOUR fault.'

"Osu's shoulders dropped at that and his face became expressionless, as though the anger had turned in on itself. His eyes flickered, hinting that there was a moment when he could have chosen not to say his next words.
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