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More messing around with other people's work instead of doing my own...
This was supposed to be somebody writing a 'passive' passage to indicate that the character was feeling helpless, which ended up sounding thoroughly artificial as a result -- generally the case where people are trying to apply a fixed set of rules they don't really understand. I can't say that I really understood where passivity came into it, but I took a few guesses at what was probably supposed to be happening and tried to achieve helplessness by other means (plus fixing the actual errors, and making a few random executive decisions because it seemed to sound better...)( rewrites )
If only it were as easy to 'fix' my own! I'm still just about struggling on with Chapter 2 and have finally *almost* reached the scheduled confrontation that was originally the whole point of the chapter -- which is going to end up as an exchange of a couple of lines at most, I think -- but I'm really starting to feel that I've cursed this story by over-promising and publishing in advance, and/or that I shouldn't have started it, and/or that, given my record over the last few years, I've just burned out on writing altogether. It's like pushing through treacle. It really is. And it's so long since there was really any joy in it (but I still think that there are massive patches of Arctic Raoul that are *good* despite everything, which just makes me feel guiltier about not even attempting to do the work on it... among the many, many other things that I feel guilty about not doing).( Read more... )
This was supposed to be somebody writing a 'passive' passage to indicate that the character was feeling helpless, which ended up sounding thoroughly artificial as a result -- generally the case where people are trying to apply a fixed set of rules they don't really understand. I can't say that I really understood where passivity came into it, but I took a few guesses at what was probably supposed to be happening and tried to achieve helplessness by other means (plus fixing the actual errors, and making a few random executive decisions because it seemed to sound better...)( rewrites )
If only it were as easy to 'fix' my own! I'm still just about struggling on with Chapter 2 and have finally *almost* reached the scheduled confrontation that was originally the whole point of the chapter -- which is going to end up as an exchange of a couple of lines at most, I think -- but I'm really starting to feel that I've cursed this story by over-promising and publishing in advance, and/or that I shouldn't have started it, and/or that, given my record over the last few years, I've just burned out on writing altogether. It's like pushing through treacle. It really is. And it's so long since there was really any joy in it (but I still think that there are massive patches of Arctic Raoul that are *good* despite everything, which just makes me feel guiltier about not even attempting to do the work on it... among the many, many other things that I feel guilty about not doing).( Read more... )
