"Afterwards": Deleted scene

I've been working on producing a 'full version' of Afterwards to be uploaded to fanfiction.net once the competition judging period is over (the entry period doesn't expire until the end of December, and on past precedent it's likely to take some time for the judges to get round to downloading everything for comparison). Because of the way I cut the text 'on the fly' as I typed it up, leaving out words and sentences as I went, this means effectively retyping and then re-editing the whole thing from scratch. Which is one reason why I've been delaying the task...

The other reason was that I'd been conscious more or less since I finished the first draft that I wasn't happy with the overall effect of the 'pregnancy scene' between Alan and Edith, despite the fact that this conversation was one of my original inspiration concepts for the story. And no, there isn't any mention of children by Edith in the current edit: I took advantage of the necessity to drop several thousand words to solve the problem by omitting that section of the scene altogether, and writing a new 'bridge' to the end (that vital first mention of "Lucille", originally appearing in a very different context!)( replacement requirements )

However... just for the sake of posterity and comparison, here is the original -- and unpolished -- draft of the scene, as it will no longer appear:
( Deleted scene )