9 August 2023

igenlode: The pirate sloop 'Horizon' from "Treasures of the Indies" (Default)
Doing the very final edits to Chapters 30 and 31, and discovering no fewer than five references to characters being held in 'his/her arms', to be altered in favour of other wording :-p

  • "found grateful oblivion in her arms"→"in her embrace"
  • "Christine hit solid earth with an inelegant thud, knees buckling. Raoul's arms were round her from behind, straining her tight"→"Raoul caught her from behind, clasping her tight"
  • "set his arms about Christine"→"caught Christine to him with a long sigh"
  • "slept last night with her clasped safe in his arms"→"clasped close against his heart"

Raoul gets to keep the last one: "he could lose himself in her arms without a thought for Erik" :-p

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