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Plot Point Fifteen
22 November 2019 12:11 amThis is not working.
I've been making very heavy weather of the two Raoul-viewpoint chapters, and I'm not sure how much of it is a basic viewpoint issue and how much is generic over-complication, but I wasn't terribly happy with the first four thousand laborious words and I was less happy with the three or four days' paragraph by paragraph work I've done on the new chapter. I was thinking of restarting that bit for other reasons, but going back and looking at my original notes just shows how far I've strayed from my Raoul PoV-concept -- I simply can't write the next bit now because it won't fit.
The whole thing just feels much too slow and much too complicated. I think the pacing is wrong -- all the extra bits I've inserted as an attempt to patch perceived plot holes (Christine being tied down dealing with the aftermath of Erik's attack on Stefan the guide, Erik seizing upon Raoul's injured arm) are taking up far too much time both in terms of narrative space and actual elapsed minutes in the scene.( Read more... )
I've been making very heavy weather of the two Raoul-viewpoint chapters, and I'm not sure how much of it is a basic viewpoint issue and how much is generic over-complication, but I wasn't terribly happy with the first four thousand laborious words and I was less happy with the three or four days' paragraph by paragraph work I've done on the new chapter. I was thinking of restarting that bit for other reasons, but going back and looking at my original notes just shows how far I've strayed from my Raoul PoV-concept -- I simply can't write the next bit now because it won't fit.
The whole thing just feels much too slow and much too complicated. I think the pacing is wrong -- all the extra bits I've inserted as an attempt to patch perceived plot holes (Christine being tied down dealing with the aftermath of Erik's attack on Stefan the guide, Erik seizing upon Raoul's injured arm) are taking up far too much time both in terms of narrative space and actual elapsed minutes in the scene.( Read more... )
