Editing issues

And this sort of thing is why it takes me forever to write anything these days...

From today's efforts:
When he had left Christine there, it had been through a haze of unhappiness that had blinded him to almost all else.The image that clung to him now [When he tried to picture the place now, the abiding image] was [his final] glimpse of the bare little Protestant church up above the steep street where Christine had said [told him] once that she might [sing] some day sing, [with its roof] silhouetted against the sky above the steep street against a sky that was the very [precisely the] colour of her eyes.

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