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Igenlode Wordsmith ([personal profile] igenlode) wrote2023-08-09 12:18 am
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Fewer arms

Doing the very final edits to Chapters 30 and 31, and discovering no fewer than five references to characters being held in 'his/her arms', to be altered in favour of other wording :-p

  • "found grateful oblivion in her arms"→"in her embrace"
  • "Christine hit solid earth with an inelegant thud, knees buckling. Raoul's arms were round her from behind, straining her tight"→"Raoul caught her from behind, clasping her tight"
  • "set his arms about Christine"→"caught Christine to him with a long sigh"
  • "slept last night with her clasped safe in his arms"→"clasped close against his heart"

Raoul gets to keep the last one: "he could lose himself in her arms without a thought for Erik" :-p

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