Batman and Alfred

[igenlode]

Perpetuating here (as opposed to perpetrating, but doing that as well) another piece of random Internet editing, because I did put far more thought and fiddling-around-with-wording into it than the recipient will ever have the faintest idea :-p

Alfred: "Master Bruce, you're back!"
Alfred: "What are you wearing?"

Bruce: "I'll tell you later."

Bruce walks into the manor, and walks towards the stairs.

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"Master Bruce, you're back!" Alfred's smile faded to a rather appalled look. "But what on earth are you wearing?"
"I'll tell you later," Bruce said briefly, walking past him and straight up the stairs.

Comments

[watervole]

Alfred`s reaction removes a lot of ambiguity.

[igenlode]

Well, I didn't include the opening sentences of the 'fanfic' (which I don't have access to now, but which ran roughly along the lines of "The scene is Wayne Manor at night. A worried-looking Alfred opens the door to see Bruce Wayne dressed in nothing but an anorak and ripped jeans. He smiles in relief and then looks shocked.")

But the reaction was there in the original; I was just trying to demonstrate how to write dialogue rather than delivering the entire story in chat format :-)